Hungary Audition!

[ironmaskmd]

● THE USER OF THIS DELICIOUS CHARACTER IS ironmaskmd!, I'M
15 YEARS YOUNG, AND HAVE BEEN STRUTTING MY STUFF FOR
THE LAST lol what? YEARS. I JOINED THIS COOL SITE BECAUSE
I love Hetalia and I know I'll have fun role-playing Hungary!. HAVE I READ THE RULES? Vodka is Love
YEAH I HAVE! USUALLY I POST AROUND THE 200-400 MARK.
OH AND HERE'S A SAMPLE:

World meetings mean something different for each country:

For Russia...well...he just sat there and gave a visible aura of impending doom. (Become one with Russia, da?)

For America they were an opportunity to try and convince everyone to built a giant superhero! But for some reason he always ended up being scolded by England...

For England they meant having to put up with America's stupid ideas and France's constant claims of "It's getting hot in here don't you think?" and "I don't agree with anything England says!"

For France they meant a chance to busy himself with his "international affairs" with as many countries as he could in one day. (Though he always made sure he kept some distance from Russia)

And Prussia had made of them the official day to announce again and again how awesome he was and help France with his "affairs".

North Italy, who liked just about everything, sat around asking for pasta, chatting with Japan or from time to time he clung to Germany's arm and said a bit too loud things like “And Germany stayed up all night with me last time I was sick! He was very worried!” that never failed to silence everyone and make Germany go really red!

For Germany they were just very stressful days where he shouted and he had to practically force the other nations to do their work. And they were even more so because every time that N.Italy said something embarrassing everyone went silent and he could hear every time France and Prussia chuckle behind him.

For Spain and Romano they meant a constant chase game where Spain would follow Romano and the latter chased around his younger brother and Germany or how Romano called him "Potato head"

Oh yeah. World Meetings meant something different for each country. And for Hungary, they meant to watch how everyone in the room made a complete mess around her.
And she always made sure she had her frying pan and camera ready.

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[Greece]

Hmmm, I would like you to make it longer please. Also, add more detail and much more of what Hungary is doing as well. It seems to be just about others, and it might be hard for someone while roleplaying to reply to it. Also, a few of the sentances are a bit wordy.

I do like your representation of Hungary though, and I think you got her personality down.

I would just like to ask you to retry and consider my critique. :3 Thank you.

[ironmaskmd]

● THE USER OF THIS DELICIOUS CHARACTER IS ironmaskmd!, I'M
14 YEARS YOUNG, AND HAVE BEEN STRUTTING MY STUFF FOR
THE LAST *still*lol what? YEARS. I JOINED THIS COOL SITE BECAUSE
*still*I love Hetalia and I know I'll have fun role-playing Hungary!. HAVE I READ THE RULES? Vodka is Love
YEAH I HAVE! USUALLY I POST AROUND THE 200-400(but now I think I may have overdone it a bit) MARK.
OH AND HERE'S A SAMPLE:

-"I can't figure it out"-suddenly said Austria -"¿How come we always end up arguing and shooting things during these World Conferences? It all happens so fast I can’t tell!”

-"Well, world meetings mean something different for each country, so we don’t always agree"-Hungary answered him.

-"No I’m sure that’s not right”-he replied-“I know because they all seem to be determined to not ever reach an agreement…”

Hungary laughed at the comment and smiled at him. (Which earned her a confused look from Austria who had been speaking seriously)

-"I can tell they all want different things because everybody does something different"- Hungary told him and then pointed at the first country she saw.
Too bad that she had pointed at Russia.

-"For Russia"-she started but soon was struggling to find the right words-" he...well… ok, Russia wants everyone to become one with him, no? So...he sits there and..."

-"...gives a visible aura of impending doom."-finished Austria with a frown.

She decided to simply ignore her little mistake and started searching (this time more carefully) for someone easier to read...which didn’t take her too long.

-"Look, for America they are opportunities to try and convince us all to build that giant superhero”- Hungary told Austria and discreetly pointed at the American-“ But for some reason he always ends up being scolded by England...”

-“For some reason?” –replied Austria obviously not catching the emphasis she had made on "by England".

-“Never mind that”-Hungary said dismissively and continued to explain-“And as for England, they mean having to put up with America's stupid ideas and France's constant claims of "It's getting hot in here don't you think?" and "I don't agree with anything England says!"-she finished while now pointing at the pervy Frenchman who was lurking around for countries to “help”.

Austria agreed with her and gave her a nod to continue.

-“For France they mean a chance to…”- Hungary blushed a little as she said it-“busy himself with his "international affairs" with as many countries as he can. (Though he always makes sure to keep some distance from Russia)

-“And as you already know, Prussia has made of them the official day to announce again and again how awesome he is and help France with his "affairs"”

Austria thought about it and was about to accept she was right but was surprised when he saw she continued to talk; Austria then noticed a strange shine on her eyes and shuddered a little.


-“North Italy, who likes just about everything, is happy by just sitting around asking for pasta, chatting with Japan or from time to time”-a slightly creepy smile forming on her lips while she pointed at Germany and N.Italy who were sitting close to them -“he clings onto Germany's arm and says a bit too loud things like:”

- “And then Germany stayed up all night with me last time I was sick! He was very worried!” –N.Italy suddenly shouted out loud and everyone in the room went silent.

-“…that never fail to silence everyone and make Germany go red!”-Hungary ended her sentence in a whisper to Austria who wasn’t sure if he wanted to keep on listening.

And they watched as said German tried to shrug off Italy with angry shouts of: “Italy let go!” and “I won’t give you pasta if you don’t stop!”

-“Obviously for Germany they are just very stressful days where he shouts and practically forces us to work”- Hungary resumed her talking-“And now even more so because France and Prussia are chuckling behind him”-and she began to chuckle as well.

-“And look! In each conference it’s the same: Spain follows Romano and the latter chases around his younger brother and Germany or how Romano calls him: "Potato head"”

When Austria heard Hungary say that and watch it happen immediatly after, he understood what Hungary had been telling him all along. (Though he couldn’t help but wonder if this is what Hungary did during all the meetings)

-“Oh yeah”-Hungary said a bit more to herself-“World Meetings mean something different for each country”

And for Hungary, they normally meant to watch how everyone in the room made a complete mess around her. And she always made sure she had her frying pan and camera ready for it.

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[ironmaskmd]

Is this any better?

[Greece]

ACCEPTED!
Much better. Though the only thing I ask of you when posting is to follow the style of everyone else's posts. Not their writing style, but their paragraph and format style. Instead of starting a new paragraph every two or three sentences, try to make it more like a regular passage. The last thing is that a few quotations are a bit misplaced. But, besides the format and paragraphs, the writing itself is very well done. :3 You may now create an account.